Wednesday, November 3, 2010

The battle between two galaxies

Once upon a time in two different unknown galaxy there were two rivals, named Jack the elemental magician with strange mystical birthmark which gives him the magical powers. They both fought and elemental magician nearly won but Super V bear ESCAPES! One day he was sleeping and he dreamed of a little bear that whispered "Hey you, I want to be exactly like you!" Then Jack grumbled "No." "Pretty please!" No!I ALREADY SAID NO!" "oh,fine." sighed the little bear. After that the magician collapsed! Suddenly he was in his own dreams that he had last night. He was in a forest fighting Super V bear and nearly loss then the little bear(Not actually) woke Jack up. Then Jack woke up. Then Jack said "thanks for saving me you little bear." but when he faced backwards it was his rival Super V bear with his big gigantic body sticking out. Then they started fighting, they were strangling, punching and kicking each other. After all that fighting, they were both tired out! They rested for an hour then they started fighting again. They were still fighting until Jack got punched. His birthmark opened and then it allowed him to use his mystical powers so he used quicksand waterfall with burning flames together then Super V bear shouted "I surrender!" Then the cops came and arrested him. Next day later it was over all the news. Jack saves the day again or maybe saves the night.

3 comments:

Melville Intermediate, Hamilton said...

Dean - What a wonderful creative story, I really liked your introduction, the introduction for Jack was really strong and powerful, and you mentioned two rivals, I think that you could have introduced Super V Bear then as well. I really liked the way that you brought excitment to the story and you had lots of ideas to put into it.
Mr Webb and Room 8, Melville Intermediate, Hamilton, Waikato.

Twelve2010 said...

What great characters you had in your story. Really enjoyed reading this well done. Mrs Pram

jericho said...

I like the way that you put a expressions on like the Pretty pleas!!!!